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Tears grown heavy...over the skys, they burn!
Break me...before I was!
I was screaming your name, as you..held me down!
I want to say I love you, but what would that do?

I never thought of life this way...
One day at a time...
One day at a time...
One day at a time...

Come, I'll pull you closer as you take me...
Then maybe you will stop...
The drugs are settling in, and I'm getting tired.
I've waited so long for this day...but not to happen like this.

The killing will stop...
Then you wont care.
The drugs are fading, and
You've realized what you've done...

Take out a bullet, on comes the gun.
yep. took...5-10 mins to write.
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it is a very strong poem, with strong words and guess what . . . and guess what, a strong message. this poem caught my attention the second i saw it and it is something that i am glad that i came across. i have never felt this way for another person's poem, that i didnt know. if anyone out there were to say that they didnt like this i would think they were crazy because this is the bomb. i wish the author luck in all future writings, and hopefully i will have the honor of critiquing a second one of theirs.
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Nny-The-Black-Blood Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
O: *speachless*
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BrainIsFriedBackIn5 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Student General Artist
8D
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:iconnny-the-black-blood:
Nny-The-Black-Blood Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
BD RAPE! xD
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:iconbrainisfriedbackin5:
BrainIsFriedBackIn5 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Student General Artist
not again! *tramatized* xD
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:iconnny-the-black-blood:
Nny-The-Black-Blood Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
xD lol
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BrainIsFriedBackIn5 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Student General Artist
^^
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:iconnny-the-black-blood:
Nny-The-Black-Blood Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009
WEEEEEEEEE
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BrainIsFriedBackIn5 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Student General Artist
:glomp:
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flamehorse Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2009
wow...thats pretty deep.
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BrainIsFriedBackIn5 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2009  Student General Artist
thank you ^^
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